XX ([info]dans_la_reine) wrote,
@ 2007-04-20 10:01:00
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There was a firey glint in Rachel's eyes...
Cripes. I have SO many things to say. I think I have them all stuck in my throat because it has been so long since I wrote. TOP OF THE LIST, after this, is a gossip entry for my pandaboy because he is <3

Anyway, I just have to get this off my chest (off where? oh-hoho). I am working hard on my wee story, it is a formal format instead of strung together images and words so

...

yeah, like structure and grammar and formality

...

are my strong points

A-hahahaha


so I decide to re-read one the crap stories they publish, and huff, splutter, gag GAWD. It is very poorly done. The first SIX para are narration, the piece has a rather bad case of adverbitis, eyes glow, characters shoot looks, characters "replied", "protested", "suddenly" do things etc etc


Oh those those bitches better publish my romance.

"What?" I asked warily kiss,


XX

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[info]ambientshell
2007-04-20 03:47 pm UTC (link)

Oh look, it's you!

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[info]dans_la_reine
2007-04-21 12:34 pm UTC (link)
pandababy!wootme

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[info]morty_baby
2007-04-20 07:38 pm UTC (link)
Hi, darlin'. Miss you <3

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[info]dans_la_reine
2007-04-21 12:34 pm UTC (link)
you are so sweet *stalks you, takes you down* oh, no *fade to black*

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[info]ministry_victim
2007-04-21 06:39 am UTC (link)
Are you among the camp that believe that any attribution should be "said" only?

I do abhor adverbs, but I'm not above the occasional "replied."

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[info]dans_la_reine
2007-04-21 12:33 pm UTC (link)
While dialogue reads better uninterupted by jarring attributions, yes, I agree, an occassional "replied" is ok though I doubt I would ever use it. However, these stories are 1100 words, and the writer used more than one so every single one stands out as hack.

<3

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[info]fieryfae469
2007-04-24 03:44 pm UTC (link)
Yes they had better publish it.

I know the feeling of having too much to say and no way to get things done... Love you darly. I tried to email you and got it mailer daemoned back to me. What is your email????



Love you dearling...

Mine is Fieryfae469@yahoo dot com.

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[info]dans_la_reine
2007-04-24 04:26 pm UTC (link)
I got the mails, sweetie, part 1, and part 2, and xox, I am just thinking on them.

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[info]fieryfae469
2007-04-24 04:40 pm UTC (link)
lots to read there... much going on.

Damien is a dear friend i met at the time she and he were apart... looked like forever. No idea still where life will take us all, but my heart will forever be with him. :)

And i will be there for him as he needs me.


Such a great romance novel i will have to write when all is said and done.

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[info]shadowtears
2007-07-21 10:32 pm UTC (link)
Yeah, the fuckers better publish your story, babe...

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